Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time.This can be benefit teenagers and the community as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In
this
contemporary world, the majority of people
are involving
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involved
with
the job sector. Change preposition
in
Moreover
, most of the adult generation
think, youngsters
need to engage Add the comma(s)
,youngsters
with
some voluntary Change preposition
in
works
in social community, when they get free time after their studies or work. Especially, some Fix the agreement mistake
work
people
illustrates
, Correct subject-verb agreement
illustrate
this
unpaid works
would Fix the agreement mistake
work
beneficial
for young Add a missing verb
be beneficial
people
and modern society.I totally agree with this
statement and I will explain, the main advantages can get by the social activities
.
To begin
with nowadays, youngsters
are exhausting
due to their loads of study Wrong verb form
exhausted
works
and other things. WheneverFix the agreement mistake
work
,
they attend to do voluntary work, I believe it would be able to develop their good qualities. Particularly, teenagers become more responsible and sociable citizens rather than others. Especially, they have Remove the comma
apply
chance
to improve skills Correct article usage
a chance
such
as problem solving
, cooperation with others, helping Add a hyphen
problem-solving
people
so on. For
example
UK survey shows, that every year UK universities conducted old Add a comma
,example
people
caring program for Add a hyphen
first-year
first year
students Add a hyphen
first-year
in
vacation time. Change preposition
during
This
survey proves youngsters
have developed qualities like loving, sharing, caring and optimism towards others. Therefore
, it would more advantageous for younger
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the younger
a younger
generation
because they can get space to prove their dedication and involment
in Correct your spelling
involvement
this
voluntary works
.
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work
On the other hand
, community
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the community
also
benefit through
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from
this
. Wherever,
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apply
youngsters
are our future generation
and who involve these voluntary activities
, this
increasingly effective and benefit
for society. It helps to reduce crimes and other criminal Replace the word
beneficial
activities
such
as burglaries, car thefts, child
trafficking. SinceCorrect word choice
and child
,
volunteers become sociable they become aware of Remove the comma
apply
this
harassment and try to decline these issues by getting necessary
steps. Correct article usage
the necessary
For example
, In 2000, Sri Lanka mainly
affected by Add a missing verb
was mainly
increase
rates of Replace the word
increased
raoes
and mainly sexual Correct your spelling
rates
races
harresments
. When Correct your spelling
harassment
harassments
school
environment Correct article usage
the school
begin
to teach about these issues Change the verb form
begins
as a result
it is becoming low rates still now.
In conclusion, in my perspective , youngsters
should want to cooperate in voluntary work in their Correct your spelling
lifetime
life time
because Correct your spelling
lifetime
definitely
it may help them to progress their personality skills whileAdd a comma
,definitely
,
society Remove the comma
apply
also
attain merits. Therefore
, If young
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the young
generation
have
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best
view for Change the article
the best
better
tomorrow, admittedly, they involve Correct article usage
a better
with
these social Change preposition
in
activities
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