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Most experiences in our lives that seemed difficult at the time become valuable lessons for the future. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

#experiences #lives #time #lessons #future
It is often said that what doesn’t break us often makes us stronger. I agree with the statement and through
this
 essay, I will illustrate how I have learned valuable lessons from difficult circumstances in my life and how I used
this
 to my advantage. Reapply the solution to similar problems. In 2019, I was promoted to a sales management role wherein I was held accountable for reviving the performance of an underperforming team. It looked like an impossible task
however
, I was able to reapply the learning I gained from my individual contributor role in 2016 to teach the ropes to these underperforming sales representatives.
This
, eventually led to the revival of the state of the business and our team finished as the top-performing sales team in North America for the year 2019. Be ready when similar circumstances re-occur. When you have experienced similar problems in past, you realise that it is important for you to always be ready in
case
 life throws a curveball at you and similar circumstances reoccur. Something that I remember was when we were living in Austin Texas. Austin city used to frequently issue boil
water
 notices which in turn always lead to a shortage of bottled
water
 in all supermarkets and shops. I learned that it was best to always store a little extra bottled
water
 at home just in
case
 Austin city decided to issue a boil
water
 notice. By doing
this
, I and my wife were always prepared in
case
 of a drinking
water
 emergency. To summarize
this
 essay, the difficult events have not only made me stronger by teaching me valuable lessons but should in
case
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 similar events reoccur, I would be able to smoothly resolve the problems or be prepared so that I can comfortably sail through the difficult time.
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