Many offenders commit crimes after serving the first punishment. Why is it happening and what measures can be taken to tackle this problem?

After being released from
prison
those same people find themselves back in
prison
again in no time. These are mainly
first
-time offenders. In my ,opinion I think that society largely contributes to
this
development as they tend to shun, shut them out and not welcome them back in an appropriate manner. As the
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we are supposed to support, welcome and treat them like we used to before they were arrested. We should allow them to feel free and know that they are still part of the community and that nothing has changed. For ,example an accountant who was previously convicted and has served his term is now back home where he is nominated to be the treasurer of a certain church, the congregation must trust that he has reformed so they should back him up and encourage him. They should not discourage or look down on him. The government has to provide them with equipment for projects which they would have mastered when they were in
prison
. I understand that inmates are taught some skills like sewing, agriculture and motor mechanic. So when they are released they must be given sewing machines, ploughs, inputs and tools for them to start some businesses and be occupied always. Idleness will lead to
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company which in turn leads to crime and
then
back to
prison
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society needs to be educated they must welcome the former offenders as they have reformed and are now part of us. Companies must employ them according to their qualifications and give them their rightful positions.
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  • recidivism
  • rehabilitation programs
  • social stigma
  • ex-convicts
  • reintegration
  • support systems
  • mental health issues
  • addiction problems
  • criminal networks
  • incarceration
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