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To meet the growing need for food to support an increasing population, a country should make use of edible insects as a food source. However, some people believe that insects are not only unhealthy but harvesting them will also negatively affect nature. What are the benefits and drawbacks of eating insects? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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As the world is growing faster than before, we are facing a lot of shortages
such
 as energy, resources, and
food
. Today we will talk about the most crucial and basic thing to live as a human;
food
. The faster population is rising, the more
food
 is needed.
However
, the speed of cultivation cannot catch up with the speed of growth.
Therefore
, recently a new idea is highlighted by a lot of
people
 as a solution to
food
 shortage;
Insects
.
People
 supporting the idea of eating
insects
 tell many benefits. One of them is effectiveness cost-wise and environmental-wise. Farming
insects
 is more sustainable and effective than any other animal. Because it doesn't require a lot of space and
food
 like cows or pigs.
Furthermore
, insets don't produce organic waste as much as livestock do. And
Insects
 contain good quality proteins as much as other meat has.
However
, there are
also
 worrisome following as well. The biggest challenge for eating
insects
 is disgusting. Most
people
 don't think eating
insects
 is as friendly as eating meat. Even though
people
 cannot see the insect inside the
food
, it is hard to change the negative thinking about
insects
 which is accumulated over the years.
Moreover
, Every living thing can have a parasite even fish and cows as well.
However
, it is hard to manage very small creatures like
insects
 to be vaccinated and sanitized like other livestock. So
people
 might be able to think about the negative effect of eating
insects
. It is inevitable to avoid finding a sustainable solution to
food
 shortages. Every option lying in front of us has advantages and disadvantages.
However
, if there is any method
that is
 able to minimize the negative effect on nature and maximize the benefits for humanity, we should consider that
first
. If the biggest challenge of eating
insects
 is our perception of
insects
 which can be shifted by ourselves, we should put more effort to change so that we can step forward for
next
Correct article usage
the next
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 generation. It is time for us to make a decision not only for
human
Fix the agreement mistake
humans
show examples
 but
also
nature
Change preposition
for nature
show examples
.
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