In many countries it is now illegal to smoke in public places. It is only fair that people who wish to smoke should have to leave the building. Do you agree or disagree?

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countries have implemented a law, smoking is prohibited.

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, government authorities declare that smoking is illegal and

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continue to smoking habit is not illegal according to their perspective. Certainly, I do not agree with

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of the public. Of course, smoking is currently prohibited in public places

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who have breathing problems, asthma and other diseases, they definitely affected by

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need to do their regular smoking habits from leaving their houses. Even though, I assume

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because they could not get healthy and fresh air.

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a responsible government can build places only for

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society. In conclusion, smoking is a deadly disease

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our globe. Admittedly, more and more nations follow the rules,

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is banned in public places.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

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342 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

secondhand smoke
respiratory problems
cardiovascular disease
clean air
public health
hospital admissions
economic benefits
smoking cessation
cultural shift
healthcare costs
smoke-free laws
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designated smoking areas
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