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Some people believe that the best way to increase road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving cars and motor bikes . To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 world, specific
traffic
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 rules and laws are important for the
safety
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 of the population . Most f
the
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people believe that getting
driving
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a driving
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 license and
for
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more
safety
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 measures
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on
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in roads
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inroads
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, it is better to
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increase
 the average legal
age
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. In my opinion, I completely agree with
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 view and in
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easy
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 I try to point out
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surrounding
 reasons with examples. There are
plethora
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 of reasons in terms of advantages for
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raising
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 the legal
age
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 for
diving
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driving
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 vehicles.
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,
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in our
 day to day life almost all individuals are using
theirown
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their own
 vehicles for
travellingpurpose
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travelling purpose
travelling purposes
. So, the number of cars and motorbikes seen
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on
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 the roads
are
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 very larger compared to the earlier time.
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traffic
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not only in the city area but
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 in the rural.That means,
even
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that even
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 school children and college students are used to
ride
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 motorbikes rather than using college buses or
the
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public transportation.
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an increase
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 in the number of road accidents. To exemplify,as per the survey of
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kerala
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the kerala
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 police department, the records
shows
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 that the number of
two wheeler
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two-wheeler
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 accidents
are
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is
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 higher especially among students or youth compared to adults in 2021.
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,
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today's
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 generation
consider
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considers
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 driving and
learn
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learning
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 to drive
in
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at
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avery
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a very
 younger
age
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is
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as
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a
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merit and
consider
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considers
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 it
as
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a part of status.
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, many of the driving
schoolsm
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schools
school
 are
supporrting
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supporting
 the youngsters and old ages and take
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 as a chance to make
profit
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a profit
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 on diving schools.
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, most of the learners are using the highways and
traffic
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 areas without considering the rules and
drove
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driving
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 rash and negligently without caring the public
safety
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, according to the report of
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the Road
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 Transportation Authority of
kerala
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, it reveals that the
cases
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number of cases
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reporting
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reported
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 against rash and negligent driving in 2020
is
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are
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 70% higher than in
2021
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the 2021
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 survey. To conclude, it is better to
rise
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raise
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 the legal
age
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 for driving ,
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otherwise
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,otherwise
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 the road accidents and
traffic
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 problems will double
in
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to
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 a greater level and it will be a
threaten
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threat
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 to
the
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public
safety
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.
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