It is inevitable that traditional cultures will be lost as technology develops. Technology and tradition are incompatible. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

The
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technology
development could make traditional cultures
disspear
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disappear
. Some
people
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belive
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believe
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that
technology
and
traditional
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tradition
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has
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many opposites . In my opinion, I partly agree with
culture
can coexist with
the
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modernization. On the one hand, it is admitted that
technology
offer
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some clear benefits for
culture
. The
primerit
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primer
primers
of cutting edge
technology
is that
bring
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brings
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more knowledge about our
culture
to
people
. To explain,
smartphone
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the smartphone
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is one of the
model
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that can help
people
searching
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internet
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the internet
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which has plenty of information about traditional food.
For example
, ‘pho’ is the traditional food in Vietnam and
people
can use the app on
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their smartphone
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smartphone
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smartphones
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to find how to cook ‘pho’;
as a result
, Vietnamese can maintain their traditional food. Another advantage is that could help
foreign
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foreigners
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know more about our
culture
. To illustrate, with the development of social media, our
culture
will more familiar with
people
in the world; for
this
reason, they can see the beauty of Vietnam traditional.
On the other hand
, there still exist some drawbacks
of
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technology
.
Firstly
, advanced technologies could be
disadvantage
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a disadvantage
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because of changing
lifestyle
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lifestyles
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in our
culture
.
For instance
,
in
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on
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“Tet
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the “Tet
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holiday”
people
often make “
chung
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cake” together but
these day
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when we internet was more popular, they tend to buy the already-made cake.
Secondly
,
people
become
more lazy
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and do not want to meet their family
in
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on
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traditional days.
In particular
, if
people
were
maked
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made
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video
call
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by social media in place of
meet
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face to face, the day family gathering could
disspear
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disappear
. In conclusion,
while
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modernization
appear
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to
beneficial
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for some reason, including
to be
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being
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a
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online book which has information of
culture
for
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apply
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people
. I still
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believe
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belive
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believe
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that
negative
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the negative
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impacts it may exert are considerable,
such
as
technology
can cause the changing in our
culture
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inevitable
  • preservation
  • integration
  • global sharing
  • evolve
  • document
  • dissemination
  • renaissance
  • cultural heritage
  • undermine
  • erosion
  • customs
  • practices
  • complex
  • multifaceted
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