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As computers translate quickly and accurately, learnning foreign languages is a waste of time? To what extend do you agree or disagree.

#computers #languages #waste #time
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It is obviously believed that
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and
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speed of translation has
deeply
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 enhanced with
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modern technology development. Certain individuals think it is not necessary for students to learn
foreign
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a foreign
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language
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replaced
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, but others disagree. I think foreign
language
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 learning remained an important role, and I will compare
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two
aspect
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 below. On the one hand, it is no doubt that computers translate
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 our life and work.
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businessmen
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business men
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businessmen
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 had to hire several translators when they did business overseas because of
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 kinds of local languages, but they can use the translation software
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 of hiring, which is decline the commercial communication costs.
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, overseas companies can feel free to make
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 with different countries and will not
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 about communication
crisis
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 anymore.
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, foreign
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 learning remained an important role in
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 communication areas. Though it is convenient for
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a person
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 to translate
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 mother
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tongue
 into another
language
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, it
is still cause
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 some
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 and grammar mistakes, because the
language
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representing
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 the local
culture
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backgrounds
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. Take Chinese,
for instance
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,
english
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 people may use "one"
represent
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 the number, but individuals can use several words and
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 to express "one" in their
language
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.
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, it
is still need
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 to learn
foreign
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a foreign
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language
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 in order to promote efficient and accurately
connetion
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connection
 between two countries. In conclusion, computers translate make our connection easily, it
is still needs
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 to learn foreign languages. It
is not only promote
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does not only promote
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 the connection between different countries
,
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promote
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 the understanding and cooperation among
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 world.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Computers are proficient in certain domains but struggle with complex language nuances
  • Machine translation lacks human touch and may not capture context accurately
  • Learning a foreign language is a valuable investment in personal development
  • Language learning fosters empathy and appreciation for different cultures
  • Multilingual individuals are in high demand in the job market
  • Acquiring new languages expands one's horizons and opens doors to new opportunities
  • Bilingualism enhances cognitive flexibility and problem-solving abilities
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