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Even when poor countries get help from rich countries, hunger is still an issue.Discuss probable causes and solutions.support your answer with specific reason and example.

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Introduction
Starvation is a common problem in developing countries, despite the overflowing donations from developed nations.
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 problem.
Body paragraph 1
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 of reasons why
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 is a common problem in developing countries.
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, governments in these regions are corrupt and some of the donations are not distributed directly to the recipients.
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, during Super Typhoon Yolanda there was a lot of assistance but the affected people were still struggling to survive.
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, natural resources are not abundant and agricultural areas are scarce. They could hardly produce their own food due to a lack of land to farm.
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, in Africa due to weather they cannot plant their own food or even raise animals. These causes lead to
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 in most developing regions in the world.
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Some solutions to be executed are research and development and monitoring of donated goods from the donors. There should be enough resources to conduct research and development in ways to combat
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 which can improve the ways of living of the affected individuals. One example is the growing of plants using alternative soil and light which can thrive in different climates. It can address the lack of agricultural areas to produce food.
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, donors like World Health Organizations and other NGOs should put an effort to monitor the donated wealth. They should check the utilization of funds to avoid being corrupted by government officials.
Conclusion
In conclusion, the
hunger
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 experienced in developing nations even with the help of developed nations will not end without addressing the causes and providing solutions.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. Infrastructure
  • 2. Corruption
  • 3. Logistical challenges
  • 4. Agricultural practices
  • 5. Sustainable farming
  • 6. Environmental factors
  • 7. Climate change
  • 8. Political instability
  • 9. Civil unrest
  • 10. Food shortages
  • 11. Dependency
  • 12. Resource management
  • 13. Distribution networks
  • 14. Crop diversification
  • 15. Disaster preparedness
  • 16. Early warning systems
  • 17. Political stability
  • 18. Peace treaties
  • 19. Family planning
  • 20. Food security
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