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Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships that people make? Has this been a positive or negative development?

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It is true that technologies have had an influence on the
communication
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 between
people
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. Technology has affected relationships in various ways and has both positive and negative effects. Technology
such
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 as telephones and the Internet is commonly used
around
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global and has had an impact on relationships in business, education and lifestyle.
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, business
people
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 who have never met each other before could make a conference overseas easily via online networks.
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, services
as
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 Discord, which is a platform that allows
people
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 to communicate online, could raise the opportunities to create relationships between students and teachers.
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, students are now able to take online lessons with a teacher who lives in different countries.
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,
people
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 who use social
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medias
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 to find others who share common interests
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 would become friends and would be unnecessary to know each other in real life. On the one hand, these developments could be extremely positive.
Communication
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people
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 was much more difficult due to the limitation of
traveling
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. In the present time, interactions via online platforms are almost as good as face-to-face meetings.
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, the
communication
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 technologies could
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 have the result
of
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 isolating
people
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 as they communicate less in the real world. In conclusion, technology has revolutionized
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communication
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people
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,
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however
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 the results do not contain only positive sides but
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 the negative effects alongside.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Interact
  • Social media platforms
  • Networking
  • Instant messaging
  • Face-to-face interaction
  • Misunderstandings
  • Emotional context
  • Superficial connections
  • Deceptive identities
  • Privacy concerns
  • Social skills
  • Video calls
  • Online presence
  • Digital communication
  • Cyber relationships
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