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Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #attention
The shown chart gives information about the proportion of transport from a country in five different fields of products in the year 2015 and the year 2016 per billion
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. The table compared changes in exports in each category among these years by percentage. Overall, products of petroleum were by far the highest export earnings among all categories, while the engineered goods have had the
next
 highest rate of transformation. Notably, just the percentage of gems and jewellery decreased in 2016 compared to the
last
 year.
To begin
 with, the proportion of shifting the petroleum and engineered commodities during these
two
 years was about 60 billion.
On the other hand
, agricultural crops and textiles were between 25 to 30 billion
however
 in 2016 all of them increased slightly. A comparison of values in
two
 years illustrates that textiles moves have risen significantly in 2016 by approximately 15%.
Then
 engineered equipment has got the number
two
 in exports with 8.5 per cent growth. there was a considerable drop in gems and jewellery ship by roughly six per cent.
two
 other products did not have dramatic growth just under three per cent.
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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