Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In the contemporary world,
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the sport
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has become
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reputed profession. It is observed that a plethora of money is being made by
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successful professional game players. According to a few
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act is unjustifiable;
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, along with others, I opine that it is justifiable. On the
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hand, a mass of humans believes that
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in spite
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important, the other occupations are not generating revenue as good as the eminent sports personalities are. Since they do not have public
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recognition
which players do have, their chances of earning are not brighter than
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.
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, despite the fact that teachers are performing
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job of cultivating future generations of the nation, their remunerations are average as compared to cricketers.
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, one should not disregard the extremely hard efforts done by a player to achieve
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success in their professional life.
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,
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of
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and I believe that players have
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rights
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to earn extra as their life does not remain limited to a
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career. They do not play only for their professional growth but they
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represent the nation in the
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worldwide
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world wide
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championships.
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, being a public figure they motivate individuals as well as play the role of an influencer. To illustrate, M. S. Dhoni, the most successful Indian cricketer, under whose captaincy, India had won the Cricket World Cup; what a proud moment for every
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.
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, the documentary film featured on him has motivated millions of young adults about
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life struggles and how to tackle them.
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, I think nothing is wrong if
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people
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are benefited by earning extra wages. In conclusion,
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the fact that fame earned by professional
sports persons
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sportspersons
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have
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made them capable to bring more income than other
people
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who are doing equally important work. While one group of
people
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is not in favour of that notion, I and other group of
people
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think that they are well paid because of their hard work for themselves as well as for
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the country
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. In my opinion, everyone should respect their
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earnings
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and should not compare
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them
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with others.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial remuneration
  • exceptional
  • merit
  • talent
  • demand
  • entertainment value
  • career span
  • physical demands
  • justified
  • unfair
  • criticism
  • income inequality
  • societal priorities
  • sportsmanship
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