Write a letter to your close friend inviting him/her to your family party. In your letter: explain why you are organizing the party describe what you are planning to do say how important it is to have your friend at the party.

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Dear Daman, I hope
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letter finds you well. It's been so long since we
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met, which is why I am inviting you to a family party that I am hosting
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Saturday. The reason why I am throwing
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little party is that my sister is moving to England, and my family and I won't be able to see her for the next two years . So, I thought
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was the perfect time for her to make some good memories before she flies out of the country . We are going to have a lot of fun because I have hired a sushi chef, who
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a good California roll
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My brother planned so many games for us to play , and my mom
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made a photo booth from scratch so that we
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capture the evening. You know we've been friends since kindergarten , and after you moved to Montreal, we all have missed you a ton. My sister really wants you there because you are a part of our family , and without you, we will not be able to capture a family picture . So, I hope to see you
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Saturday. I already got your flight tickets , so don't worry about that. Your bestie, Anmoldeep

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For task response: add one more small detail about time or place of the party.
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For task response: say a little more about why this party matters to your sister and family.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: check small space and comma mistakes to make the letter easier to read.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: use linking words like also, so, and because with care, so each idea flows in a smooth way.
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For task response: you answered all parts of the task clearly.
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For task response: the tone is warm, friendly, and right for a close friend.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: the letter has a clear start, middle, and end.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: each paragraph has one main idea, which helps the reader follow you.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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