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🔶Some people prefer to live in hot climates. Whereas others love the lifestyles in countries with cold climate. 🔸Discuss both views and give your opinion

#🔶some #people #climates #love #lifestyles #countries #climate #🔸discuss
Climate is a very significant factor for
people
 to live in any place when they have
choice
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. But unluckily , some
peopel
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people
 born in Atlantica others born in Arab peninsula it seems just their fate. Some
people
 prefer to live in A cold
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weather
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wether
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weather
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 ,
on the other
hand
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 others do not afford the ice.
Next
 essay we will discuss both
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perspectives with examples.
First
 of all , a lot of
people
 who
born
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 in a very cold climate used to be
familier
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familiar
 with it. At least , to survive .
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 completely understand
thet
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that
the
 reason. but , what impressed me when some
people
 dream to move from hot and sunny
wether
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weather
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 to
cold
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a cold
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 one.
iIt
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it
 is
realy
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really
 making me
shoked
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shocked
stoked
. I have
fond
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with
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sun
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the sun
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 not
with
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freezing.
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When
sun
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the sun
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in
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 the sky every other problem could be
sove
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solved
sole
slave
 . In my view of point life is very boring in
cold
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a cold
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area
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 and
quiet
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quite
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 difficult. I belong to those who
is
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 very
intersting
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interesting
with
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in
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sun
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the sun
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 because
evert
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every
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 simple thing will
related
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with
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to
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sun-like
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the sun
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sun
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suns
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 like plants , activities and general life. I understand the opposite migration from cold to hot. Of
course
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 I do not mean very hot
wether
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weather
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 which is
also
 tough to live in . I mean the median
temprature
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temperature
like
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is like
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tropical
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a tropical
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 area
whic
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which
 is fantastic. Eventually,
people
 will still argue
in
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this
 point
endless
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. I believe I will
continoue
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continue
 supporting the hot on the cold.
May be
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 because I grow up and spent most of my own life in
hot
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a hot
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 area.
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