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Computer are being used more and more in education some people say that this is positive trend, while others argue that this is leading to negative consequences. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

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Technology has overpowered everywhere and it is no doubt that educational institutions have relayed massively on digital sources, especially after covid-19. We can surely say that
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 the internet has made the lives of students and teachers very efficient, it surely did leave some negative impact as well. Let us discuss both points below. After the pandemic, the spike in usage of mobile and laptops has increased substantially ,especially among the pupils. The reason is the introduction of online classes. The staffs were able to continue their lectures online. Both the pupil and the teachers needed only a laptop or mobile phone and an active internet connection to connect and work together.
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, the usage of digital appliances has a negative health impact ,especially among the younger ones. The reports say that around 45% of the children complained of eye pain due to high exposure to blue light and 71% complained of neck and back pain due to prolonged sitting. Since we are consumed by the digital world, the kids are always on a mobile or a laptop unlike the previous generation when playing outdoors was common. In my opinion, the introduction of the internet in educational institutions was very helpful ,especially during the pandemic period but it shouldn't be the trend in the future. Children should mingle with other classmates and play while growing up
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 they are sure to have numerous health complications. As it is the younger generation are overpowered by technology and I think the only time they would socialise with fellow students is during their school or college life.
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