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Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things .Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it . Discuss both these views and give your own opinion .

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We have been living with advertising for a long time, and its consequences in the decisions it makes us made have been
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discussed
 deeply but without any consensus. While the majority of the
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 think that publicity has had a strong
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 what we buy, critics
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suggest
 that advertising is no longer working to
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 us. In my opinion, the critical opinion seems more rational and
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 with, according to several studies, the capacity to
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 attention is very tied to the uniqueness of what we're seeing. Advertising
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 become so uniform
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 for
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 are difficult to distinguish what an ad is selling.
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, it is
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 becoming so present in our daily lives
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 longer attractive. One example I can give regarding
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is related to the ads we all the time see on websites: they are so annoying that
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 prefer to close them the faster the better.
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, there is no denying the fact that our
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societies
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advertising from what is not. In
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 to purchase something only
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 a set of ads. In conclusion, even though
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publicity
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 has had an important role in
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shaping
 our likes or dislikes, we can see a decreased trend in the importance that it has in terms of
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influence
 our decisions.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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