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All education and healthcare should be funded by the government and free for everyone. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#education #healthcare #government
With
this
 letter, I would like to express my motivation to study in Canada in the Fall of 2022. Recently, I have been accepted to the full-time course-based Master of eHealth
program
 offered by the University of McMaster. The
program
 spans 24 months, starting on September 1st 2022. According to the
program
 director, the coursed-based full-time students will need to complete 5 semesters to graduate. The eHealth Master
program
 includes an 8-month co-op internship as a mandatory requirement for completing the degree. During
this
 time, I am expected to work full-time
around
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 37,5 hours per week. Academic and Professional background I graduated in 2014 with a
bachelor
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 degree in doctor of dental surgery
in
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2014
at
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 Cantho University of Medicine and Pharmacy, Vietnam. After graduation, I worked as a community
health
 worker and dental clinician at a local medical
center
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at
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 Can Tho city, Vietnam for 4 years from 2014 to 2018. In 2018, I was awarded a
full ride
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 scholarship from the Danish government including
full
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 tuition fee waiver and
monthly
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 stipend
around
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 1.100 CAD for my
master
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 in Public
Health
 at the University of Southern Denmark. During my study, I volunteered to work
in
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 a
health
 innovation conference
at
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 Odense, Denmark as an event coordinator. Through
this
, I had a chance to learn from many speakers and companies about their digital care products
such
 as the use of
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a drone
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drone
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 to deliver medicine in remote areas or the application of virtual reality to help
Alzheimer
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 patients to recover their memory. I was inspired and felt very interested in
this
 area as
technology
 has unfolded many potentials to help resolve complex issues in
healthcare
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 sector. In my
second
 year, I was admitted to a talent
program
 called the citizen science talent
program
 and worked on a digital
health
project
 called
aging
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 in
smart
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a smart
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 city. In
this
project
, my group discovered how
elderly
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 in Denmark used
technology
 to overcome
health
 issues during the covid 19 lockdown. The result has strengthened the advantages of using
technology
 in healthcare and indicated a high
technology
 literacy among elderly participants. After graduation, I collaborated with a start-up company in Copenhagen as a medical advisor and researcher in the research and development team to work on a digital
health
project
 about developing a wearable device that helps monitor patients with chronic lung diseases remotely. I feel very fascinated
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this
project
 and it has nurtured my strong interest in
health
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technology
 area. As a medical professional and researcher, I do not possess a strong
technology
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 knowledge and I.T related skills,
therefore
, I have faced numerous challenges when working in the
health
 informatics field and I believe that taking a professional
program
 in
health
 informatics will be an optimal choice to excel in
this
 area.
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