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Compare the advantages and disadvantages of three of the following ways of learning a foreign language. State which you consider to be the most effective. • studying on your own • taking lessons with a private tutor • taking lessons as part of a class • taking lessons online • going to live in a country where the language is spoken

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In
this
 contemporary world, the majority of
people
 are pursuing to learn unknown
languages
.
Moreover
,
its
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 a trend that being a bilingual or multilingual person in
today
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today's
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 globe.
Consequently
, the public has tried different methods for
learn
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learning
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 these unfamiliar subjects
by
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through
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 individual
studies
, going to the
language
 classes, abroad where that specific
language
spoken
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is spoken
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 and so on.
Besides
,
this
 essay will focus on the three main plans
to
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for
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learning
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learn
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languages
 and what are the pros and cons
in
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of
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 these means.
To begin
 with,
the
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most
of
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the
people
 who have exhausted in their busy lifestyle, never have
chance
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a chance
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 to learn
studies
 at the academy or the institutions. Certainly, they move to do
such
 activities by themselves.
As a result
, they are able to analyse weaknesses and make
own
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their own
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 plans to improve their skills in
own
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their own
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 way.
In
addition
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,addition
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 students have engaged with universities and colleges
for
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to
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learn
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learning
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 the overseas speeches.
Consequently
, they have space to
engaged
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engage
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 with other members
for
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to
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 develop speaking in
classroom
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the classroom
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.
Furthermore
, local
people
 have gone overseas due to
learn
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learning
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 international
languages
. Currently, students have been trying to abroad
for
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to
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pursue
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pursuing
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 their higher
studies
.
As a result
, they have
great
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 opportunity to sharpen their skills in that environment.
On the other hand
, students who do
self
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self-studies
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studies
, they would not have
opportunity
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the opportunity
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 to correct their mistakes.
Next
, lecturers do not try to give more attention
for
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to
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 a single student in classroom activities.
Therefore
, learners would not have space to clarify their problems by
this
 method. Rather,
people
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,people
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 who do not know
language
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the language
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 in that international countries, at the
begining
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beginning
they
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apply
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face many problems in that society and sometimes they are misunderstood by others. In conclusion, when
people
 know more
languages
, have
reputation
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a reputation
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by
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in
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 their society
people
 wherever they are able to get job offers in local or international nations. In my perspective, these study methods have advantages while
have
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having
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 disadvantages too. If learners have good determination with
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a goal
the goal
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goal
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goals
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, indeed they will expertise in specific
language
 in their lives.
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