Some people think governments should spend less money on arts and invest more in education. How far do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Although
there are some who believe goverments
ought to save money Correct your spelling
governments
government
spending
less on Change preposition
by spending
arts
, other believe education
is more important and the money have
to be Change the verb form
has
invest
in Wrong verb form
invested
this
. In my opinion, both field
are important for people and Change to a plural noun
fields
it
could Correct pronoun usage
they
be benefits
.
On the one hand, some believe Change the verb form
benefit
arts
have been an important field
of study and development for the
human being. Correct article usage
apply
Furthermore
, a benefit could be that open
our minds. Thanks to Correct subject-verb agreement
opens
the
Change to a genitive case
the humanity of the art
arts
humanity have found out many
parts of Change preposition
about many
the
history since many Correct article usage
apply
painting
in the cavern have shown us how people live Change to a plural noun
paintings
long
time ago. Add an article
a long
For example
, without arts
could be difficult know
about our history. Fix the infinitive
to know
Moreover
, the arquitechture
Correct your spelling
architecture
have
been created with the old art found Correct subject-verb agreement
has
out
and today many architects are inspired by the old Change preposition
apply
Correct your spelling
blueprints
blue prints
. Correct your spelling
blueprints
Nevertheless
, many people think arts
is a
unnecessary spend for the governments.
Change the article
an
On the other hand
, education
is the main field
to learn about anything that we want to know and in many countries governments understand without education
could be difficult improve
our advance in Fix the infinitive
to improve
Add an article
the field
a field
field
like technology or medicine. In my opinion, Change the noun form
fields
this
could be mixture
Correct article usage
a mixture
with
Change preposition
of
arts
. For instance
, in many universities
there are Add a comma
,universities
Add an article
an opportunity
opportunity
to Fix the agreement mistake
opportunities
chose
Wrong verb form
choose
subject
like painting while students are studying engineering. Fix the agreement mistake
subjects
However
, there are governments over the world who think this
could be a mistakes
for students and they have to study only their career and save money Correct the article-noun agreement
mistake
deleting
Change preposition
by deleting
this
subjects in schools or universities.
In conclusion, there are some that Correct determiner usage
these
believes
Change the verb form
believe
education
is more important than arts
, but in my opinion, both could be a complement to a
development Correct article usage
the
for
the humanity with a lot of benefits.Change preposition
of
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