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Nature has a more significant impact on human adult intelligence than nurture. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Many
people
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 believe that nature has a lot of influence on a
person
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 than their
upbringing
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. I completely disagree with
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 opinion and think that
education
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 plays a bigger role in human
life
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 than nature.
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 of all, I believe that nurture is
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 important period in human
life
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. When
people
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 begin to form
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a separate
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, their
upbringing
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 helps them or negatively affects them, because at an early age
people
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 do not realize what they need, whereas
education
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 will determine their deeds and value for them. The period of
education
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 cannot be missed because after that no one will give
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education
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 and a
person
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 can just go with the flow of
life
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.
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, there are a lot of
people
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 who have become successful thanks to their
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 and they show
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 by their actions.
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,
education
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 affects the future of every
person
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.
Education
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 can be very useful in the later
life
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 of a
person
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 because it is the foundation of childhood,
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 it can show the
upbringing
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 and attitude of parents. A
person
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's future may not go according to plan if a
person
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 is ill-mannered, or a
person
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 can become a great
person
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 if his
upbringing
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 is good.
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, many
people
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 grew up
from
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upbringing
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 at home and
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 is one of the proofs that
education
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 affects a
person
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 more. To conclude, I want to say that I do not agree with the opinion of most
people
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 who believe that nature has
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 significant impact on human adult intelligence than nurture.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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