2. Many people believe that nature plays a more significant impact on human adult intelligence, while others claim that an individual can train himself to become high-intelligent. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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part of society
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nature has a significant influence on human adult intelligence
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while
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part says that people can self-train to develop their brainpower. I agree that high intelligence or other
abilities
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of the nature, because, they can be passed by
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and
children
with innate
abilities
learn faster than others All
children
are like their parents.
This
means that facial features or other body features are inherited. Thinking ability or
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talent for different skills is
also
passed on. For
this
reason,
children
often carry on the work of their parents.
That is
why
children
of musicians often become musicians and
children
of actors become actors.
For example
, the son of the musical genius and leader of Metallica, James Hatfield, is
also
successful and recently started his own music band called Bastardane. Man learns throughout his life. So his skills and
abilities
develop as he grows up. But some people develop faster than others as
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of
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inborn talent. Often
this
can be seen in primary school, where some
children
are better at math or writing. But retarded
children
may have talents for
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of activity. To summarize, any ability, including the intelligence of an individual, can be trained and possessed. But it is easier for people with a natural talent and they will have better results.
Besides
, we inherit many of our skills from our parents. That's why I think that nature has a huge influence on us and our
abilities
.
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