Some people think that formal education should start for children as early as possible. While others think that it should not start until 7 years of age. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In contemporary society, a significant number of parents start their
kids
to learn academic subjects at
a
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early age. Regarding
this
, opinions are divided over whether or not early
education
is necessary. I strongly believe that learning before 7
years
old is more beneficial than learning at the rest of
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.  On the one hand, some
people
argue that in childhood, developing physical ability is more beneficial than learning higher
education
in order to maintain their health. Since many parents push their
children
to study hard before 7
years
, a lot of
kids
suffer from a lack of physical activities. Thereby leading to
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obesity.
For example
, A survey conducted by the Korea
Education
Foundation has revealed that 20% of
kids
who enjoy various activities
instead
of formal
education
have healthier bodies than others.
Hence
, childhood is
key
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stage in developing healthier bodies.
Moreover
, if
kids
study at
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too early stage, they might lose
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interest
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learning as they do not understand the purpose and importance of studying. once they feel that learning is boring and tiring, they tend to easily give up studying.
On the other hand
, others claim that learning as early as possible is efficient to learn since
children
learn faster than other age groups owing to the absence of mindset. In terms of
this
, When
people
become older, it is hard to fix their mindset and habits.
For instance
, recent media in Korea reports that nearly 30% of
people
who learned English before 7
years
old have better pronunciation than others.
Hence
, early
education
is beneficial.
In addition
, in
this
competitive society,
people
need an enormous number of qualities in order to get job opportunities.
Therefore
, early
education
plays an efficient means of being successful. In conclusion, while I accept that early
education
has drawbacks that make
children
decline physical ability and lose their
interests
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learning, I would point out they should be taught before 7
years
. Not only can early
education
be efficient, but it may
also
be less stressful. Since
children
are supported by guardians
such
as parents and teachers, they can fully focus on studying without
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financial things. From my point of view, I saw many adult international students suffer from foreign languages since they have to consider various problems as well. If they had learned other languages earlier than 7
years
, they would have not suffered from them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cognitive development
  • Social interactions
  • Formative years
  • Curiosity
  • Structured environments
  • Preschool activities
  • Unstructured play
  • Developmental pace
  • Emotional and social skills
  • Undue stress and pressure
  • Natural development
  • Informal learning methods
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