In contemporary society, a significant number of parents start their
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early age. Regarding
, opinions are divided over whether or not early
is necessary. I strongly believe that learning before 7
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.
On the one hand, some
argue that in childhood, developing physical ability is more beneficial than learning higher
in order to maintain their health. Since many parents push their
to study hard before 7
, a lot of
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obesity.
, A survey conducted by the Korea
Foundation has revealed that 20% of
who enjoy various activities
of formal
have healthier bodies than others.
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stage in developing healthier bodies.
, if
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interest
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learning as they do not understand the purpose and importance of studying. once they feel that learning is boring and tiring, they tend to easily give up studying.
, others claim that learning as early as possible is efficient to learn since
learn faster than other age groups owing to the absence of mindset. In terms of
, When
become older, it is hard to fix their mindset and habits.
, recent media in Korea reports that nearly 30% of
who learned English before 7
old have better pronunciation than others.
, early
is beneficial.
, in
competitive society,
need an enormous number of qualities in order to get job opportunities.
, early
plays an efficient means of being successful.
In conclusion, while I accept that early
has drawbacks that make
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learning, I would point out they should be taught before 7
. Not only can early
be efficient, but it may
be less stressful. Since
are supported by guardians
as parents and teachers, they can fully focus on studying without
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financial things. From my point of view, I saw many adult international students suffer from foreign languages since they have to consider various problems as well. If they had learned other languages earlier than 7
, they would have not suffered from them.