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Some people think that formal education should start for children as early as possible. While others think that it should not start until 7 years of age. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In contemporary society, a significant number of parents start their
kids
 to learn academic subjects at
a
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 early age. Regarding
this
, opinions are divided over whether or not early
education
 is necessary. I strongly believe that learning before 7
years
 old is more beneficial than learning at the rest of
stage
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.  On the one hand, some
people
 argue that in childhood, developing physical ability is more beneficial than learning higher
education
 in order to maintain their health. Since many parents push their
children
 to study hard before 7
years
 , a lot of
kids
 suffer from a lack of physical activities. Thereby leading to
children
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 obesity.
For example
, A survey conducted by the Korea
Education
 Foundation has revealed that 20% of
kids
 who enjoy various activities
instead
 of formal
education
 have healthier bodies than others.
Hence
, childhood is
key
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 stage in developing healthier bodies.
Moreover
, if
kids
 study at
an
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 too early stage, they might lose
the
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interest
towards
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 learning as they do not understand the purpose and importance of studying. once they feel that learning is boring and tiring, they tend to easily give up studying.
On the other hand
, others claim that learning as early as possible is efficient to learn since
children
 learn faster than other age groups owing to the absence of mindset. In terms of
this
, When
people
 become older, it is hard to fix their mindset and habits.
For instance
, recent media in Korea reports that nearly 30% of
people
 who learned English before 7
years
 old have better pronunciation than others.
Hence
, early
education
 is beneficial.
In addition
, in
this
 competitive society,
people
 need an enormous number of qualities in order to get job opportunities.
Therefore
, early
education
 plays an efficient means of being successful. In conclusion, while I accept that early
education
 has drawbacks that make
children
 decline physical ability and lose their
interests
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 learning, I would point out they should be taught before 7
years
. Not only can early
education
 be efficient, but it may
also
 be less stressful. Since
children
 are supported by guardians
such
 as parents and teachers, they can fully focus on studying without
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 financial things. From my point of view, I saw many adult international students suffer from foreign languages since they have to consider various problems as well. If they had learned other languages earlier than 7
years
, they would have not suffered from them.
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