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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Even though nowadays technologies can significantly improve the production of
agriculture
, there is still a great number of the population who suffer from hunger. In
this
 essay, I will explain the reasons that lead to
this
 situation, and give my suggestions to solve
this
 problem. As far as I’m concerned, there are three main reasons that can result in
this
 case.
First
 of all, different kinds of natural disasters can destroy all the work that
farmers
 did during a whole year.
For instance
, the flooding in some regions can kill all the plants and
agriculture
. And the
farmers
 lose their only income.
Secondly
, wars can
also
 affect the activities of
agriculture
.
For example
, now the war between Russia and Ukraine has already made an extremely negative impact
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 the world. Because the two countries are both one of the biggest countries that export their production of
agriculture
. Due to
this
 war, the two countries have reduced dramatically their exportation.
Last
 but not the least, in spite of the development of technology, in many nations, people don’t have enough money to buy the latest equipment, so they still use the outdated way to work
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 their farms. In terms of my propositions,
firstly
, the governments can provide education and different help. They can give
farmers
 free classes to learn the newest technologies and how to utilize the latest equipment.
This
 action can truly help
farmers
 to have a better environment to do their jobs.
In addition
, The U.N. should react when there is
conflict
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 between nations.
This
 can make the war finish as soon as possible. In conclusion, natural disasters, regional conflict, and lack of knowledge and technologies contribute to the worst situation. From my perspective, the governments and the U.N. can put into
effort
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to solve
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this
 problem.
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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