Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different culture and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

Music
has
been appeared
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in the life of
human
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humans
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since the beginning of time when
people
used to know how to speak. We can clearly see the different kinds of
music
througout
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throughout
the history of
human
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humans
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as well as countries. That's why some
people
think
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music
can
united
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either various races of
people
and different countries into one. In my opinion, I strongly agree with
this
and
explains
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the reasons
of
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this
statement in
this
essay.
Firstly
, depending on the preferences and accents of our ancestors,
everyone
has
their
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different kind of
music
. It's
obviously
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everyone
likes or appreciates if ones from other countries or nations love and enjoy their cultural
music
.
Moreover
, by holding
music
concepts and tournaments, anybody who
love
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music
from any
nations
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can show off
thier
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their
traditional
muisc
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music
to
everyone
and that will bring
closer
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them closer
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to each other.
For example
, a big competition show like American Idol has proved that
people
from around the world gather
in
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there to perform their
music
and parade are rooting and encouraging for them regardless of their
races
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race
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.
Besides
the aforeheadmentioned merits of the
music
, it can relax, and refreshen our mind after getting so much stress from works or studies. So, every different age
groups
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group
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of
people
like
music
and listening together can be more fun, enjoyful and bring them together. We can see that sweet and beautiful
music
like pop
music
are popular among family and they can stronger their bonds by spending time
with
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singing those songs.
However
, modern
music
like rap and rock
music
are
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a little against between youngsters and elders as older
people
prefers
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quiet and good
music
like classical
music
while young
people
fall
in
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rush
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and
rythemic
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rhythmic
music
like rap and rock
music
. To conclude,
although
it has a few drawbacks,
music
has the ability to bring
everyone
around the world together.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural diversity
  • harmony
  • integration
  • bridging gaps
  • foster
  • ignite
  • embrace
  • communicate
  • celebrate
  • appreciate
  • inclusivity
  • universal language
  • emotional resonance
  • shared experiences
  • intercultural dialogue
  • intergenerational connections
  • cultural exchange
  • catalyst
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