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Universities should an accept equal numbers of male and female students in evening subject to what extent do you agree or disagree?

#universities #accept #numbers #students
It is clear that there are many people
think
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 that the same number of men and women should be accepted
in
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into
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University
. I tend to disagree with the idea and in
this
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 I will explore
about
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my opinion
in
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on
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 the
beneficial
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benefits
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 for
university
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universities
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 and
society
 and
also
 improving the situation of families. Undoubtedly, all people should get
degree
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a degree
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course
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courses
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 based on their ability and talent.
However
, it is beneficial for
university
 and
society
.
This
 idea will not only improve
highest
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the highest
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 academic level, but
it
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also
help
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 in keeping the best level of education. Some filed of
university
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universities
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 like
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a nurse
the nurse
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nurse
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nurses
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, need girls more than boys, if they
selected
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were selected
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 based on equal gender, they would not be fair.
Also
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,Also
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this
 is more talent to the more progress of
society
,
for example
, a woman manager that has high education and merit usually is better than a man manager is lack of Degree
University
 and without competence for every place
such
 as offices.
In addition
,
this
 idea can be important to
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prefect
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perfect
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 living of families. Gender discrimination usually is not good in
community
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a community
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 so
male
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males
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 and
female
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females
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 are equal in all of their life. Education and participation in
university
 programs based on the competence of individuals can be a prelude to non-discrimination in all matters of life, especially in the family.
Moreover
, it will have led to
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increase
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the
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in the
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 presence of women in
society
 compared to today and
the
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a
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 better the upbringing of children because more intelligence and awareness
especially for
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, especially for mother in the family,
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the mother
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mother
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mothers
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 in the family often can cause to better thinking in family management and
nurture
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the nurture
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 of children. In conclusion, on my view, the selection of
university
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a university
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 should be based on merit; it would be unfair according to gender. It can be positive
effects
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effect
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 to be
better
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a better
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circumstance
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circumstances
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of
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for
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 people in
society
,
university
 and family.
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