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Animals are in danger of extinction.some people say that we should prtoect only those animals which are useful to humans. do you agree or disagree?

There is no denying the fact that we are under threats of global warming every creature has increasingly become extinct. The copious folk petition that we should only protect endangered
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 which will be going extinct in near future and there is no need to save all
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. I firmly disagreed and notwithstanding the given view.
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 with, there is copious folk who argue that the benefits of saving endangered
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 considerably outweigh its disadvantages. The main reason for believing
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, the other reasons that the entire planet species are increasingly becoming extinct owing to the environmental destruction mainly contributing factors are deforestation and pollution, and hunting,
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, there is a need to prioritize the plan
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 we need to protect those
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 which are the greatest threat of extinction
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 as panda and China has launched a plan
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 year and saved numerous pandas and keeping them in the shelter solely designed for the creature panada. In conclusion, I believe both arguments have their merits. On balance,
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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