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to what extent has the internet made life more convenient? give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#internet #life
Modern technology has made a great impact on human,s life, especially the use of
internet
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the internet
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is became
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 a common utensil for
people
now a days
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nowadays
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.
People
 are finding
its
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 helping them to live more convenient in
this
 new era, in
number
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 of ways
as a result
 almost all
people
 are
carring
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carrying
caring
smartphone
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smartphones
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 with
internet
connection
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connections
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. The main advantage of having
internet
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 is
people
 can find out any information without depending on newspapers or television.
For
example
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 by using
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a smartphone
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smartphone
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smartphones
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 we could read news and
checking
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information
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the information
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in
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 google.
Also
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 many
people
 could work with help of
internet
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the internet
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 at home without
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loosing
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 their job
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especially in the covid pandemic,
as a
result
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 they can reduce
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the expence
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expence
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expense
expenses
for
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of
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 travelling to
office
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 and save time.
Moreover
 many
people
 especially the youngsters are turned to online purchasing ,
instead
 of finding time for shopping in stores and it provides them
an
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oppertunity
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opportunity
 to select by comparing
price
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prices
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 and products with different brands.
Besides
 that, today,s education system
is highly depends
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 on technology and information from
internet
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the internet
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, like college students
and
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apply
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doing assignments and many online
classess
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classes
through
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with
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help
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the help
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 of
internet
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,
instead
 of direct
class
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classes
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. To conclude ,
eventhough
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even though
 there
is
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are
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 some issues happening because of
missuse
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misuse
 of
internet
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the internet
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 and kids are more addicted
with
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to
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 it, 90% of
people
 living in
this
 world make using in
thier
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their
 daily activities and it
giving
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gives
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 them
more
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a more
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 comfortable life in the aspect of work ,communication, saving time and so on...
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