Some feel that cities shold be designed to be beautiful while others feel their functionality is more important. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.
nowadays so a spike in population, Urbanization is one of the major traits of the
21
century among the world's dwellers that existing cities are either expanding or new megacities Correct your spelling
21st
come
into place. Many individuals Wrong verb form
are coming
are felt
that metropolises should Wrong verb form
feel
design
to be attractive in appearance, Wrong verb form
be designed
whereas
others are considered
that features are more essential. In Wrong verb form
consider
this
essay, I will highlight both sides of this
view and in the end my own opinion.
Firstly
, Some communities believe that town
should be constructed appealing because it will create more occupational opportunities for residents. Correct article usage
the town
Additionally
, it will attract many visitors and boost various forms of businesses such
as hospitality and hotelling, food marketing, transportation etc, which enhance public living standards effectively. To illustrate, Turkey annually produces millions of dollars from tourism sectors and about 20% of the population
earning sources are motels and buffets.
Change noun form
population's
Secondly
, Some individuals are thought
that serviceability is paramount since it devotes more basic facilities to the habitants. Wrong verb form
think
Furthermore
, vast road infrastructures enable folk to use public transportation and give up having personal cars which are more environmentally friendly. Besides
this
, Proper health care conveniences enable people to get access to cheaper sources of wellness. For example
, According to
the world road safety index
, 20% of the world's old cities have wider pathways rather than new modern megapolises.
In a nutshell, Both sides of the argument have their own merits and drawbacks. On balance, Correct your spelling
World Road Safety Index
however
, it seems that municipalities should have more functionalities because it
Correct pronoun usage
they
releases
stress from people and like areas Correct subject-verb agreement
release
nation
have more life expectancy.Fix the agreement mistake
nations
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