Scientists and technology experts seem to be more valued by modern society than musicians and artists. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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twentieth

century is the era of

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and science which are critical for

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community to survive, while

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and

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have gradually lost their importance during

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century. I believe that

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the vital roles that

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and science are playing can not be underestimated, the effects of

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and

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on people's lives should not be overlooked. The reasons for investing

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IT experts and

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are many.

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of all, today's modern lifestyle tightly depends on the internet and

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. One can take the example of

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gadget of

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phone which individuals can not live without anymore.

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is because the majority of human interactions which is

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integral part of

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society are being done virtually over the phone or other applications like Watsapp and Facetime.

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, protecting the ones who are working in

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areas and adding new features to the available ones leads to

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of

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lifestyles, which is valuable for societies.

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, the problems of

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a new

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era

is

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changing. A good example of it is the new virus which has affected the world

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considerably

recently.

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new challenge

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the importance of

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in

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society to tackle

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and protect them in the unprecedented future. Despite the above, valid points are being discussed in favour of

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and

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by many. They usually take the example of recent

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compulsory

isolation which could contribute to the increase of human mental diseases but

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controlled by

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helps

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of musicians and artists. By attending virtual concerts and online

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courses many people tackle depression. Added to

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personal aspect is the greater effects of

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and

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on countries.

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,

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and traditional

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usually are a part of counties' industries.

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means neglecting them can affect

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of a country.

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that, they are essential for cultures to survive.

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, people can say

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value of them is not lesser than science and

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. To sum up, scientist and IT experts

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an increasingly important role and advocating for them to survive is essential.

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, I believe that musicians and artists are

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important for communities and should be preserved at the same level.