Some people think that the main factors influencing a child's development these days are things such as television, friends and music. Others believe that the family still remains more important. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.
There is no doubt people use more and more social outlets in the contemporary world. While some certain individuals think that parents obviously play a fundamental role
behind
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child
to get a toddler, a teenager and an adult. Others claim that social Use synonyms
factors
outside of the family influence Use synonyms
much more
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child
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development
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in
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of
child
. He starts the Use synonyms
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journey from Use synonyms
mother’s
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his mother’s
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For example
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grow
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grows
with
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brought
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the brought
that
when the mother and the grandparents while telling the fiction stories to the Correct word choice
apply
child
while he is eating or playing that he Use synonyms
try
to catch the world, Change the verb form
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incredibly
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enhance
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develop
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develops
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respect
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animal
On the other hand
, those who argue that social Linking Words
factors
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such
as television, friends and music are needed for Linking Words
human's
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human
development
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since
birth as Change preposition
from
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child
learn different things from the TV shows. Add an article
a child
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watching
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watches
study
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studies
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child's
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a child's
life
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Moreover
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he learns how to mingle with different characters, team Correct pronoun usage
apply
bond
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bonds
make
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making
independent
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an independent
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drawbacks
draw backs
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drawbacks
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use
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uses
it
excessively and inappropriately. He might be Correct pronoun usage
them
take
less credit in his exams due to Wrong verb form
taking
addiction
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to
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the
influence
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mix
with toxic friends.
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family
environment that the Correct article usage
a family
child
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development
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child
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