Some people spend a lot of money attending cultural or sports events. Is it a good or a bad thing? Give your opinion and examples from your own experience.

Cultural and
sports
events
are mostly attended by
alot
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a lot
of folks , and by doing so they tend to invest
alot
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a lot
of their
money
.
However
, I strongly recommend the idea of spending
money
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Cultural or rather
sport
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events
because they are
source
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a source
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of
entertainment
where
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by
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apply
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people
tend
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enjoy themselves and
also
during the
events
, individuals interact with one another
hence
creating a platform for socialisation.
First
and foremost, with the current economy
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it is hard
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go
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get anything for free.
This
applies as well in
entertainment
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field
where
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by
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the more one pays the more fun they have. To explain
further
, during cultural or
sports
event
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events
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they do offer various entertainments that are charged as per
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individuals'
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capability,
therefore
those who pay more tend to have more fun unlike those who pay less.
For instance
, a research was done by Kenyatta university students in the year 2002 and showed that culture or
sport
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sports
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activities
that many folks have paid
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lot of
money
tend
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for tend
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to be more fun because they do offer various forms of
entertainment
.
Therefore
, in
oder
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order
for
people
to get more
entertainment
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they have
put
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more
efforts
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financially .
Secondly
, cultural or
sports
activities
are not only places where humans go to play games and learn more about culture but
also
create a forum for socialising.
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money
for attending the
events
will definitely pay
of
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owing the fact that
people
will get a chance to interact during the ceremonies. To illustrate
this
, on
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22 of
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2020 daily
news paper
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newspaper
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, there was a report by a
sclora
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sclera
that stated that 70% of human beings who attends cultural
activities
that they have financial invest
on
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end up making long term friendships.
Thus
, allocating funds for attending
sports
or cultural
celebration
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celebrations
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will
enables
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one to mingle with other folks . In conclusion, spending funds on cultural and sporting
events
should be normalised . Henceforth, I reckon it is a positive idea to invest
money
on
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cultural and sporting
activities
since the
activities
are
source
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of
entertainment
to humans and
also
during
such
events
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people
connect with both new and old friends.
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