IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 4.5

In the future, noboy will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#future #noboy #newspapers #books
Recently, there is a statement which predicts
people
Change noun form
people's
show examples
 intention in reading
habit
Fix the agreement mistake
habits
show examples
. A certain segment of society assumes everybody will prefer to read books or newspapers digitally while the others think in a different way. Regarding
this
 matter, I strongly agree with the prediction saying
the
Correct your spelling
that
show examples
 online reading will dominate the offline for some reasons. Digital readings have a big advantage in
term
Fix the agreement mistake
terms
show examples
 of
economical
Correct article usage
the economical
show examples
aspect
Fix the agreement mistake
aspects
show examples
. As all of us have known, the reduced cost by not printing it will give a cheaper price than the printed one. As
the
Correct article usage
a
show examples
 clear example, we should pay
for
Change preposition
apply
show examples
Rp 5000,00 to read
an information
Remove the article
information
a piece of information
show examples
 in Kompas newspapers while we can get the same news for free by accessing Kompas.com.
This
 would be a very good situation since now we are having
a
Remove the article
apply
show examples
knowledge equality when most
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
people
Add an article
the people
show examples
 can get
informations
Change the wording
information
pieces of information
show examples
 without any economical barrier. Hopefully, it will significantly increase the rate of literation in society. In the addition
of
Change preposition
to
show examples
 the previous statement,
accesibility
Correct your spelling
accessibility
 is the other advantage
in
Change preposition
of
show examples
 using online media.
For instance
, we just have to do some clicks to get
a specific information
Remove the article
specific information
a piece of specific information
show examples
 right now while previously, we had to spend our time
by
Change preposition
apply
show examples
finding a particular column in a newspaper. By getting easier access, it may increase people's productivity which potentially impacts to nation's economic level
subsequently
. In summary, the digitalisation of media
publication
Fix the agreement mistake
publications
show examples
 will give positive
impacts
Fix the agreement mistake
impact
show examples
for
Change preposition
on
show examples
 the nation and society.
Cheaper
Add an article
The cheaper
show examples
 price due to printing efficiency will bring equality for everyone who wants to read while easier
accesibility
Correct your spelling
accessibility
 will improve time efficiency in finding particular news.
Therefore
, I support the idea to shift printed books and
newspaper
Fix the agreement mistake
newspapers
show examples
 to online
Correct your spelling
media
show examples
medias
Correct your spelling
media
show examples
.
Submitted by arfienugraha on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: