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In the modern world, it is possible to shop, work and communicate with people via internet and live without any face-to-face contact with others. Is it a positive or negative development?

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In
this
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 contemporary world, the majority of people use technology in their day to day life.
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, whenever humans have feasible access to get more advantageous factors through technological platforms. Particularly, they are able to gain benefits from shipping, working and communicating without anyone.
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 the use of digital premises.
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 with, wherever people have engaged in their jobs and studies without any other participants. Nowadays, children are attending online learning methods due to critical circumstances especially,
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the covid-19 pandemic period.
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, in Srilanka , 80% of employees have done their businesses with e-commerce .
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, it creates
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benefit
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benefits
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 to
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human
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 life
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 as attains to save time and money in
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 lifestyle.
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, wherever public has options to buy products via
internet
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the internet
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 like e-bay, daraz, Alibaba and so on. Since, they are able to purchase international items , which they
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are willing
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 to buy through e-business premises.
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, human beings have
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to use
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 technological gadgets to communicate with each other without interacting
people
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with people
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.
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, in 2000,an Indian survey shows ,
65%of
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 students used mobile phones to contact their relations and friends for chatting purposes.
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, shopping and
communicating
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communication
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 have been developed and a person would become conveniently and plausible
mean
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for
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of
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 their life. In conclusion, significantly, the modern technology help to evaluate
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 improvements to work , shop and talk without face to face discussions obviously, these aspects have been used to fulfil our needs and requirements. In my perspective, I believe, these changes have advantageous factors for mankind.
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