IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7

Some people say that it is possible for a county to be both economically successful and have a clean environment. Others disagree. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Lately, a plethora of topics is being seriously talked about among various individuals and groups, and one prominent topic is the environment and economy. In the succeeding paragraphs, the reasons for which
people
Use synonyms
 are divided on clean environment and social development are to be discussed. With regard to most
people
Use synonyms
 advocate that being both economically successful and environmentally clean isn't possible. It is a common fact that even though
countries
Use synonyms
 have adequate budgets to feed the population in different
sectors
Use synonyms
, allotting money for waste management and robust measures to mitigate the detrimental effects of pollution and deforestation is not an ideal way. To exemplify, whether utilizing the budget on preventative measures to preserve the ecosystem might potentially affect other
sectors
Use synonyms
 is a prime concern of
such
Linking Words
people
Use synonyms
.
Therefore
Linking Words
, they doubt, that initiating actions to protect the ecosystem not only ruins opportunities in other
sectors
Use synonyms
 but
also
Linking Words
 various inevitable options like employment options that help citizens survive and thrive.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, the main reason why some
people
Use synonyms
 believe that a country can be both developed and neat is primarily because of the information and proven strategies of various
countries
Use synonyms
. To make it more clear, considering the town planning and economic standards of nations like the UK and the US,
it is clear that
Linking Words
 there are plausible ways to tackle any problems in terms of economy and environment. In
such
Linking Words
countries
Use synonyms
, even though the resources are not up to the mark or short, they have strong bonds with other top
countries
Use synonyms
 to adopt and replicate feasible methods to shield their country with the support of their authorities.
Moreover
Linking Words
, they can concentrate on other fields to keep their economy from falling apart by introducing job roles in
sectors
Use synonyms
 like waste disposal and recycling plants as well.
To conclude
Linking Words
,
while
Linking Words
 there are some important concerns from
people
Use synonyms
 who believe eradicating environmental problems and supporting the country all at once is an unrealistic goal,
it is clear that
Linking Words
 the responsibility is solely on the government's side in suppressing the challenges

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Task Achievement
In terms of Task Achievement, ensure that the introduction more clearly outlines the discussion points to be covered, and the conclusion succinctly summarizes and restates your opinion. The response needs to comprehensively address all parts of the prompt, including clear arguments for both views and a well-supported personal stance.
Coherence and Cohesion
For Coherence and Cohesion, work on paragraphing and topic sentences to enhance the logical flow. Ensure that linking words are used effectively and accurately throughout the essay. Additionally, while some coherence in ideas is present, strive to make the progression from one idea to another smoother and more intuitive.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: