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Parents should spend more time with their children helping them with their homework. Do you agree or disagree?

#parents #time #children #homework
In
this
 rapidly changing world, lots of
people
 reckon that more
money
 and
resources
 should be spent on the research of planet travelling and immigration. I strongly agree with
this
 idea, and I think
this
 tendency would promote the
development
 of space exploration and artificial intelligence. In the long term, the living condition on the earth will not suitable for humans due to environmental pollution, while moving to other
planets
 with a better environment is beneficial for the
development
 of the
next
 generations. In recent decades, lots of factories used to release industrial waste and carbon dioxide into the environment directly, which caused global warming and frequent natural disasters
such
 as flooding and earthquake.
As a result
, the deterioration of the living condition is detrimental to human
development
, while spending more
money
 on planet exploration and encouraging
people
 to immigrate to other
planets
 may tackle
this
 problem.
In addition
, increasing
money
 and
resources
 are being spent on space exploration which could promote the advancement of technology and encourage humans to achieve the goal of multi-planet immigration. There are lots of useful
resources
 and broad spaces on other
planets
 for
people
 to use and explore.
As a result
,
people
 could produce more offspring with enough
resources
 to live, which
also
 contribute to the
development
 of human culture. In conclusion,
people
 should spend more
money
 and
resources
 on multi-planet research, because the living condition of the earth will be detrimental to the
development
 of humans and more spaces and
resources
 on other
planets
 are beneficial for human
development
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • parental involvement
  • academic development
  • parent-child relationship
  • supported and encouraged
  • confidence and independence
  • educational strategies
  • autonomous learning
  • foster a love for learning
  • tailored interventions
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