Road accidents have become one of the biggest cause of fatalities nowadays. What are the cause of such accidents? How can this problem be dealt with?

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Nowadays, Road accidents are one of the greatest problems that we have. It can be caused either by vehicles
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each other or
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a person crossing the street, as a consequence; large-scale disabilities and damage can
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70 years ago when public transportation had invented to facilitate moving from one place to another,
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; the prevalence of death because of
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road accident is increasing over time. Authorities managers came up with different interpretations about the main reason
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credit it to the irresponsible drivers who drink alcohol before taking their cars,
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; they may drive fast on
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why people under thirty are the most exposed to
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of tragedies, due
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fact of they are still immature and unreasonable. Others suppose the infrastructure of highways and
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too. I believe that both of these two things are is the cornerstone of car accident
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; I blame the governments because they can be more restricted toward passing rules to punish
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and rush drivers, I should say testing their blood for drugs and breath for alcohol is the best way to have enough evidence to imprison them. Good designing of highways and
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will have a huge influence in reducing the rate of accidents, so why doesn’t
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spending it to mitigate the losses. Impartially, we
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responsible for
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, so sticking with rules and being responsible is the only way to save the losing lives from
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incidents.
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