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Some people think that the most important thing the rich can do with his money is to help people. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Some
people
 believe that the rich ones can help others with their
money
 and some
people
 don’t accept help from them. In
this
 essay, I will either agree or disagree with
this
 statement.
Firstly
, I will write about how they can promote start-up entrepreneurs.
Secondly
, I will tell whom can they donate to. Beginning, in our time there are
people
 with brilliant projects.
however
, they do not have
money
 to translate them into reality. For
this
, investors invest in them. in order to help
people
 without capital and at the same time earn
money
 themselves. even if the project fails,
people
 who accept help will not owe anything to the contributor.
For example
, my friend was looking for an investor for his business. he wanted to open a chain of foreign cuisine restaurants. one rich man decided to invest in
this
 field of activity. his cafe immediately became very popular in our country. Almost, the number in thirteen per cent of the Russian population suffers from poverty. Every day they create funds to help low-income families or persons with advanced needs. The rich donate large amounts of their
money
 to these reserves.
For instance
, there is Usmanov's fund, which develops folk art theatres in Moscow. at the moment it has 21 million dollars. In conclusion, we see that those who have a lot of
money
 should help others, and I fully agree with
this
 statement, based on the arguments I have given. And I totally agree with the statement that rich human beings need to help others from the arguments I have given above.
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