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Some people say that it is necessary to use animals for testing medicines intended for human use. Others, however, think it is cruel and unnecessary. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, somehow people think that machinery
life
 has been placed
instead
 of customs and traditional
life
. So, it is sometimes said that there is no relationship between them. In
this
 essay, I am going to inform
that
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you that
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 you can utilize them together. Let’s begin with
this
 general idea. It has been a strong belief that
technology
 is based on
a
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breaking with traditions and it can’t be an agreeing point in civilizing. And, they do
this
 because they imagine
which
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that
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technology
 refers to
future
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the future
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 and tradition refers to
past
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the past
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 so they are opposite of each other.
Furthermore
, it is resulted by them that when you are involved in machinery
life
, you are away
of
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from
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 customs;
for instance
: when there is
an
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innovation like
telephone
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the telephone
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 you avoid going to your relatives’ house. There is another side to the debate,
however
. Scientists have proved that
technology
 is not an opposite point for
culture
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a culture
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 so you can reckon about their relationship. It is true that
technology
 refers to
future
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the future
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 but another side of
this
 word is its
meaning--making
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life
 easier--and not more.
Therefore
, you can tell that
technology
 does not declivities people, it increases the quality of
life
. According to
this
, not only
technology
 is not
destroyer
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a destroyer
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 of traditions but
also
it
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encourages having both of them but in
different
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form
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. Western people follow
this
 rule as well as possible. Having considered all these arguments, I’ve come to believe that it is not impossible to achieve them together and you can utilize them progressively.
On the other hand
, they are almost complementary to
this
 issue.
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