Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we do not need, others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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the company do
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advertisement
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for unwanted
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there is a section of the audience who say
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is a good way to know about the upcoming product.
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we will discuss how some
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are using
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's religious beliefs to sell their
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we will see how advertisements made some useful
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popular among the masses. Our world is divided into many religions. It is said that there
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around 40 religion that exists in the present time.
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are very emotional about their religious sentiments. These
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of
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usually fall victim to the
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that sell religious goods, they advertise
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in conjunction with religion. For ,example the is a company in India that sell clothing material advertising that ,
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will make your god happy.
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some
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are lying to us, there are some
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which make the best use of the
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platform.
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such
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as Phones, computers and Cameras are a few of the best
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that have changed
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's lives.
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of
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products
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has been a crucial step to
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the awareness among
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Apple Inc has used advertisements to describe the use of their computer and supporting devices. In Conclusion, many
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are taking full advantage of advertisements. And
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is a great launchpad for your product,
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it's up to the
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, how they will use
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • persuade
  • manipulative
  • unnecessary
  • excessive
  • artificial needs
  • desires
  • consumers
  • oversaturation
  • impulse buying
  • financial problems
  • inform
  • educate
  • features
  • benefits
  • innovations
  • raise awareness
  • social issues
  • positive behavior
  • enrich
  • well-being
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