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Many countries today are experiencing problems associated with noise pollution (excessive noise above a normal background noise.) What are the causes of this phenomenon, and what effects does it have on the people affected?

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Based on a line graph of fast food
consumption
 among Australian teenagers between 1975 and 2000, over a 25-year period. Overall,
consumption
 of
fish
 and
chips
 declined over the period, while pizza and hamburger
consumption
 increased. In 1975, the most popular fast food among Australian teenagers was
fish
 and
chips
, eaten 100 times a year. That's much higher than pizza and hamburgers, which are consumed about 5 times a year.
However
, there was an upward trend from 1980 to 1985, with
fish
 and
chips
consumption
 gradually declining over a 25-year period, eventually reaching levels close to 40. Notably, teens ate the other two fast foods at much higher levels.
Consumption
 of pizza gradually increased until it surpassed that of
fish
 and
chips
 in 1990.
Then
 it
leveled
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 off from 1995 to 2000. The biggest growth was in hamburgers, where hamburger eating increased dramatically in the 1970s and 1980s, surpassing
fish
 and
chips
 in 1985. It's the same level as
fish
 and
chips
 to start with, 100 times a year.
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