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Band 7.5

You and your family are planning to spend a weekend at a seaside hotel. Write a letter to the hotel, making the arrangements. In your letter tell them when you will be arriving and leaving explain what type of rooms you would like, and ask how much the weekend will cost ask about activities and places of interest near the hotel You should write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am contacting you, because,
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my wife, and my two kids are planning to go to your hotel
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 weekend and enjoy New Year's Eve in it. We have seen your advertisement regards
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 event, and we are really interested in joining it. For that reason, I would like to make some inquiries to you about it. Our plans are to arrive on December 29th until January 3rd. As I mentioned, We are going with our two children, so We would like two bedrooms, one single and the other could be a double for them. But obviously, the final decision depends on the price per night for each of them. Could you tell me how much is it?
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, I really appreciate it if you could tell us about any activities or places that we can find around your hotel that we might visit before or after New Year's Eve. I really appreciate your time and I am looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully. Brat Pitt

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task achievement
Make sure to check for minor grammatical errors and punctuation to enhance clarity. For example, 'inquiries to you about it' can be simplified to 'inquiries about it.'
coherence cohesion
Try breaking down complex sentences for easier readability. You could split 'I am contacting you, because, I my wife, and my two kids...' into smaller sentences.
task achievement
The letter has a clear and polite tone that is well-suited to the context.
coherence cohesion
The structure is logical, with separate paragraphs for arrival and departure, room requirements, and activities. This makes the letter easy to follow.
coherence cohesion
The opening and closing of the letter are appropriately formal and polite.
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