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Many social media accounts are fake. What problems does this cause? What solutions can you suggest?

#media #accounts
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The dependence on social
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 is increasing day by day in
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 modern era.
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 brings the problem of impersonation of a person on social
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, which can lead to some major issues
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 as misguidance of online followers;
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, these issues can be easily tackled by implementing some basic security features on the platform and by providing alertness towards
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 issue.
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 with, encountering a fake
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 is quite common when using social
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 platforms. These fake
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 can cause confusion among audiences of an
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 as they will not have a clear vision of the real
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. What it means is that some fake
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 are created with the intention of scamming people in the name of some famous celebrity. To explicate it, Punjab Police Cyber Crime Branch, recently, issued a notice, in which they stated that most social
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accounts
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 have more than 2 fake
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, which sometimes leads to scamming of followers of the real
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 holder. Despite being
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 a serious issue, it has solutions that are quite simple. The first and foremost solution is to add some validation in
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 creating process; validation can be done by having some physical documental proofs
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 as a national
id
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ID
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 card,
driving
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driver's
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 license and many more.
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, it can
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 be done by AI which can recognize the face
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 creating an
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 and check
wheater
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whether
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 the person has an
account
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 already or not.
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, Facebook has AI that can recognize similar faces and make a list of
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 that can potentially be fake
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,
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 it asks the
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 owners to verify themselves by providing some documental proof or by having a video chat with their agent.
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, Social
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 platforms can
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 run consciousness campaigns to spread
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 of false
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 and the dangers of these
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.
To Conclude
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, The increasing trend of creating fake
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 is not very beneficial for end users and it creates a lot of hurdles for users in identifying the reality. But, These problems can be easily solved with improved security and more awareness.
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