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Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefilt teenagers and community as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that
teenagers
 should need to
volunteer
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tovolunteer
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 do unpaid
community
 volunteer
work
 in their free time in their local
community
. I totally agree with
this
 statement as it could be an opportunity for
teenagers
 to learn and develop their
skills
 and
in addition
, get to know the people around them and make connections from doing unpaid
work
 as well as serving the
community
 in which they live
in
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. On the one hand, there are many benefits for
teenagers
 to learn and prepare themselves to do
work
 in the real world by doing unpaid
community
work
. Give reasons,
then
 an example.
For example
,
firstly
,
teenagers
 will get an idea of how to use their knowledge and apply the
skills
 they have learnt from the
school
 in real life by doing
community
work
such
 as at
school
 events.
Secondly
, these
community
work
/
assignments could help them to develop communication
skills
 that they could use after graduation.
Thirdly
, they could make connections with many people in the
community
 while they are doing unpaid
community
work
/
chores . The connections they make could lead them to get paid
work
/
employment when they finish
/
graduate from
school
 and start to look for a job.
On the other hand
, it is arguable that they could do paid
work
 during their free time
instead
 of doing volunteer
work
 .
Firstly
, the paid
work
 will help them to earn more money and they could help to support their family for daily living expenses.
Secondly
, they could learn to manage their money while they are doing paid
work
/
tasks .
This
 could help them to learn money management
skills
 which they could use to manage their daily life in the future. In conclusion, in my opinion, it may not be necessary to get
teenagers
 to get paid
work
/
employment while they are studying at
school
. They could learn
work
skills
 while they are doing unpaid
work
 without getting pressure from
work
.
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