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Some parent spend a little free time with their children today. Why is it so? Why do you think this affects more, parents or children?

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It is generally acknowledged that some
parents
 have
a
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little leisure
time
 with their
children
 in contemporary society.
This
 essay will outline why the
parents
 have a lack
of
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time
 with their
children
, and suggest why
such
 a trend influences
children
 more than their
parents
.
To begin
 with, in the modern era, a significant number of
parents
 suffer from hectic schedules at
work
. as prices have
went
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 up, people need more money than before to obtain basic needs
such
 as accommodation and food.
Moreover
, the number of
single
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single-parent
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parent
 families has increased since people can divorce. Single
parents
 , to a certain degree, have to
work
for
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double
as
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 the absence of
the
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 partner.
For example
, almost 20% of
single
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single-parent
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parent
 families in Korea suffer from a lack of interaction with their
children
 since they have to
work
 hard due to financial difficulties. As the example clearly illustrates, not only busy
parent
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parents
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,
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 but
also
 single
parents
 play a key factor in a scarcity of free
time
 with their
children
. Regarding
this
,
such
 a trend
affect
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 both
parents
 and
children
. On the one hand, some
parents
 who do not have enough
time
 to share with their
children
 tend to neglect their
children
. Paradoxically, because their
work
 in order to support their
children
 is too busy, they do not have enough
time
 to take care of
children
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.
For instance
, recent media reports in Korea
has
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revealed
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reveled
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 that approximately 5% of
parents
who
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 both
work
 outside
are not remember
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 their
children
’s birthday.
Hence
,
parents
 who spend
a
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little leisure
time
 with
children
 have a tendency to become neglectful.
On the other hand
,
children
 can be exposed to violent video games and sexual movies owing to the absence of
parents
’ monitoring. As
regard
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this
, many adolescents
are fall
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 into antisocial tendency since they are not educated
parent
 appropriately.
However
, they might become independent as they have more responsibilities to deal with housework
instead
 of their
parents
. In conclusion,
parents
 and single
parents
 who have to support their
family
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families
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 do not have enough
time
 to spend with their
children
. While I accept that they might become neglectful, the impact of
this
 on
children
 is huge as they can be involved in antisocial
behavior
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 or become independent.
Submitted by hiasince38 on

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