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In many countries household waste e.g food packaging is increasing day by day.What are the reasons ? How can this problem be solved

Eating
behavior
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 and tight schedule at work are strongly related to household
waste
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particularly
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 in
food
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 packaging garbage. In most
of
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countries
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the countries
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, rubbish related to
food
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 packaging is climbing
along
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 the time.
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about
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the reasons behind
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 issue and the possible solution for it. Modernisation change
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people
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people's
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 attitude especially related to their eating behaviours particularly due to
tight
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the tight
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 schedule at
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the workplaces
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workplaces
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workplace
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.
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 because due to
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this
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these
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 circumstances, individuals prefer
the
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practical things
especially
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 for their eating choices
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 as fast
foods
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 that have been wrapped easily.
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, busy schedules make
people
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do
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not have enough time to eat, so individuals tend to pick packaged
foods
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 that are very practical for their conditions.
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, most of the youngsters in big cities
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 as Jakarta prefer fast
food
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such
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 as dim sum as their favourite lunch menu as it is easy to eat and already contained in the place so they do not need to prepare another plate.
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,
this
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 habit will increase the rubbish from packaged
foods
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 but
in contrast
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 manage
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people
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 time owing to its effectiveness. Government regulation related to
food
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 packaging may decrease the usage of
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 type of
food
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containers
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container
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.
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 because by limiting the utilization of packaged
foods
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,
people
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has
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 to bring their own
equipments
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equipment
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such
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 as lunch box so the garbage from packaged
foods
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 will go down considerably.
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, using private eating
equipments
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equipment
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 is more friendly to the environment as it can decrease the rubbish from
food
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containers
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 or plastics that are
also
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 the source of
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greenhouse
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green house
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greenhouse
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emission
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emissions
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, in several restaurants in Jakarta, buyers have to bring their own boxes if
people
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 want to buy certain
food
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 products, so the residual
waste
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 from the package will go down significantly.
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, government rule in
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food
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the food
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 industry
play
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 a crucial role in decreasing the usage of
food
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containers
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. To sum up, eating
behavior
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behaviour
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 relating to tight schedules influence
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people
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people's
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 choice of packaged
foods
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 and increase the
waste
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 from
those kind
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that kind
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 of
foods
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.
Authorities
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Authorities'
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regulation
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regulations
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 that
limit
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limits
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 the use of
food
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 packaging and
motivate
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motivates
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 individuals to prepare their own
food
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containers
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 may give
remarkable
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a remarkable
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 reduction in
waste
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product
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products
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 from
food
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 packaging.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Consumer culture
  • Convenience-driven lifestyle
  • Pre-packaged meals
  • Takeaway options
  • Recycling processes
  • Regulations
  • Landfills
  • Marketing strategies
  • Consumer behavior
  • Excessive packaging
  • Environmental impact
  • Public awareness
  • Sustainable practices
  • Educational campaigns
  • Eco-friendly choices
  • Government regulations
  • Incentives
  • Waste reduction
  • Sustainable packaging materials
  • Technology and infrastructure
  • Waste management systems
  • Advanced sorting technologies
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