You are not satisfied with the meal service provided at your university hostel. Write a letter to the accommodation manager. In your letter: Explain what the issues are with the current service Describe how it is affecting you and others Suggest improvements you would like to see
Dear Mr Fenil,
I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with the food service at the university hostel. The cost paid for the meal service is for the whole day.
However
, there are many days when breakfast is not available or is limited.
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Secondly
, dinner is only available till 7 PM, which is why most of the students miss it, as they reach the hostel around 8 PM after completing the final lecture. Linking Words
Moreover
, canteen staff are not helpful for these issues at all, and never take accountability for any questions asked. Linking Words
Also
, a few areas of the hall are not cleaned daily, which leaves everyone disappointed.
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problem and change the timings for lunch and dinner Linking Words
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everyone's timetable, and Linking Words
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also
a few improvements in maintaining the hygiene in the canteen would be appreciated.
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matter is resolved promptly.
Yours sincerely,
DarshanLinking Words
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task response
For task response: add one more clear effect on you and other students, like poor health or less time to study.
task response
For task response: make your ideas a bit more specific. Say what breakfast is missing and what clean up is not done.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: put one main idea in each paragraph. Keep food time in one part and cleaning in another part.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: use simple link words like also, because, so, and finally to join ideas more smoothly.
task response
For task response: you answer all parts of the task and give clear problems and some good fixes.
task response
For task response: the tone is polite and right for a letter to a manager.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: the letter has a clear start, body, and end.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: your greeting and closing are correct and formal.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite