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In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not to travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

#future #people #holiday #country #travel
Travelling is the best way to get
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 experience in our lives. In
this
 contemporary world, the majority of the people
willing
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are willing
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 to
travel
different
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to different
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 destinations around the world. Despite
of
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that, some people argue that the public will try to go on holiday in their home country, while others implicate that the
communities
 will
definetely
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definitely
adopt
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adapt
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 to
travel
 foreign countries in the future.
This
 essay will focus on these both views and I will give only
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 too.
To begin
 with, human beings have various economic standards in
the
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their
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communities
. Wherever the richest families have access to visit other nations. Due to
this
, they have engaged to
travel
 abroad to get marvellous experiences which they saw by photos
through
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on
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 the internet.
For example
, tourists are able to get information about Thailand's cuisines and tourist hotspots through websites.
As a result
, it paves the way to attain convenient and quick databases
such
 as able to reserve hotels or to do other arrangements in that particular international country.
On the other hand
, particularly, some
communities
 are visiting for vacations to the nearest tourist attractions in
native
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their native
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 country. As long as, local citizens have faced economic crises due to the covid-19.
Moreover
, parents always try to go
other
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 locations where they can spend
low
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the low
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 amount of money . Admittedly, most of the
communities
 have low income in their lifetime.
For instance
, employers who have business commitments , ignore to
travel
international
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 locations.
Consequently
, they never engage
to
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in
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 travelling because these things distracted
to
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their daily routines in a bad way. In conclusion,
in
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from
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 my perspective, I assume that the majority of
man kind
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mankind
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 will not take part to
travel
 abroad. Wherever the community bn the majority of them
are include
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 in the
middle class
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 family sectors.
Thus
, these
middle class
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 circumstances make them
to
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neglect
abroad
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their abroad
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 travels. If they admit to
visit
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visiting
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 countries,
definetely
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definitely
 in future they will face
to
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apply
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economic impacts in their lives.
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