Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outweigh the disadvantages?
While some
museums
charge an entrance Use synonyms
fee
, others are free of charge. Use synonyms
Although
charging an admission Linking Words
fee
might dissuade some potential visitors from visiting, it allows Use synonyms
museums
to have more funds available for maintenance and preservation, and it Use synonyms
also
makes visitors more careful while visiting Linking Words
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Add an article
the museum
a museum
museum
. In my opinion, the benefits Fix the agreement mistake
museums
surpasses
the drawbacks by a big margin.
Charging an access Change the verb form
surpass
fee
might discourage some Use synonyms
people
from visiting Use synonyms
museums
. Use synonyms
People
are generally attracted to free Use synonyms
museums
compared to Use synonyms
the
paid ones. Correct article usage
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In addition
, admission Linking Words
fee
might make Use synonyms
museums
seem like it is not accessible to everyone. Use synonyms
Furthermore
, it could deter Linking Words
people
of low income from visiting Use synonyms
museums
. Free to visit Use synonyms
museums
are more popular, and more Use synonyms
people
tend to visit them. It can be exemplified Use synonyms
the
Change preposition
by the
Use synonyms
museum
of London which is widely known and gets visited by a large number of Change the capitalization
Museum
people
every day.
In spite of the setbacks, charging an access Use synonyms
fee
allows Use synonyms
museum
Use synonyms
authority
to earn enough revenue to take better care of the invaluable Fix the agreement mistake
authorities
items
and preserve them. Often Use synonyms
museums
are severely underfunded; Use synonyms
therefore
, Linking Words
a
earning source enables Change the article
an
authority
to properly preserve the precious historical reminisces. Add an article
an authority
the authority
Moreover
, it allows Linking Words
museums
authority to hire more staff for maintenance and historians for researching Use synonyms
items
so that they can find out more about them.
Use synonyms
For instance
, Linking Words
Louvre
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the Louvre
museum
is extremely prestigious for Use synonyms
their
well preserved historical objects and the security they provide, and it is all possible because they charge a small admission Correct pronoun usage
its
fee
.
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When visitors Use synonyms
pays
to visit a Change the verb form
pay
museum
, they are usually more cautious about not damaging or ruining any historical objects. Generally, Use synonyms
people
are pretty careless when visiting a free Use synonyms
museum
; whereas, when there is an access Use synonyms
fee
they are more vigilant about the Use synonyms
items
. Use synonyms
As a result
, Linking Words
people
can take a closer look at Use synonyms
items
presented in a paid Use synonyms
museum
compared to the Use synonyms
fee
for all Use synonyms
museums
. Use synonyms
Moreover
, managing security in Linking Words
a
paid Correct article usage
apply
museums
is much easier than Use synonyms
free
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in free
museums
since Use synonyms
people
are attentive and watchful while visiting them.
In conclusion, I believe the merits of charging an entrance Use synonyms
fee
for visiting Use synonyms
museums
significantly outweigh the shortcomings since it provides more security, better preservation of historical Use synonyms
items
, better Use synonyms
researching
capabilities and so on and so forth. Personally, I think there should an entrance Replace the word
research
fee
for every Use synonyms
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museums
except a few ones.Change to a singular noun
museum
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