Some people think that it is necessary to travel abroad to learn about other countries, but others think that it is not necessary to travel abroad because all the information can be seen on TV and the internet. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

It is generally acknowledged by certain individuals that
traveling
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abroad is needed in order to learn about other nations.
However
, others assert that they can earn the majority of
information
through
media
.
This
essay will outline why they support each side and suggest my opinion on the matter. On the one hand, thanks to the development of technology, individuals can travel abroad indirectly through
media
.
People
can watch ordinary
people
’s daily life through various documentaries.
Therefore
, it is convenient to learn about other
countries
with
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sitting on
sofa
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the sofa
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.
In addition
, not only can
Internet
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the Internet

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provide a lot of
information
to
people
, but it may
also
contribute to using video conferencing, thereby leading to having a conversation with local
people
remotely.
For instance
, zoom which is
video
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a video

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massenger
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service
allow
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users to
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meet

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meat
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meet

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other
people
over the world in order to share
information
about
between
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apply

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different
countries
.
Hence
,
media
facilitates
people
to gain knowledge about other
countries
remotely.
On the other hand
, some
people
argue that if individuals do not go overseas, they have limits in understanding other
countries
. As there
are
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is

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an
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a

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unique gesticulation which is hard to describe, visiting other
countries
can be a key factor in learning
other
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about other

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cultures.
For example
, eye contact can sometimes be polite or rude depending on the situation in Korea. Since there
are
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is

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various
situation
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situations

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that cannot be illustrated, foreigners cannot use appropriate gestures
although
they have watched Korean dramas. As the example clearly illustrates,
traveling
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travelling

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abroad is an efficient means of learning about other nations.
Moreover
, due to
anonymous
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, a significant number of
people
spread wrong
information
about other
countries
.
Therefore
, it is hard to differentiate between
wrong
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the wrong

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one and
right
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the right
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one.
As a result
, visiting other
countries
is a good way to figure out the truth or the stigma about other
countries
. In conclusion, while I accept that
media
can sometimes be useful to learn about other nations,
people
should visit abroad directly since there
are
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is

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wrong
information
on
media
.
Additionally
visiting other
countries
is the most efficient way to fully understand other cultures. I recommend that
people
should use
media
first
and
then
they
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apply

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go abroad.
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