Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

The developments of a
country
are an important issue for the citizens to discuss
either
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whether

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the
economic
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should be considered to be
improve
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or other types of
progress
.
This
essay will examine both viewpoints and
also
give my personal view. There are several kinds of improvement the
governments
should play a huge role in, and the
economic
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is one of them. The
progress
in
economic
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economics

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can provide humankind
numerous
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benefits. The
first
of which is a great amount of income to the
country
that the
governments
can run the
country
by allocating money for other aspects of development. The reason is
because
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if the
economic
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of the
country
is growing, it means the investors are willing to invest in the
country
.
As a result
, it leads to an
increase
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rate of employment which the citizens are beneficial from it.
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,
people
are employed because
the
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international businesses are encouraged to be built from the
governments’
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goal
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.
On the other hand
, some
people
say that other types of
progress
are equally important to be taken into account, and medical care is
also
a serious argument. Due to the growth in
a
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number of the old, many old
people
have chronic health issues that have not been discovered the medicine for or do not have enough aid
kit
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kits

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because of a lack of the resources. The
governments
can be responsible for
this
crucial problem by supplying the
necessity
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tools for professionals to help those
people
effectively.
For instance
, in Germany, doctors can access
to
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many advancing machines for operating. In conclusion,
the
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economic
progress
is significant for the population.
However
, there are various conceivable kinds of development that the government can serve
to
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the citizens. In my opinion, I think the
governments
should consider many other aspects of the development in order to run the
country
proficiently.
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